Chiyuri's Piss-Tavern
Jan 7, 2015 20:25:24 GMT
Post by relick on Jan 7, 2015 20:25:24 GMT
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membres:
- relick
- fera
- aki
membres:
- relick
- fera
- aki
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Reviews for the wonderful Arya's WriCom first round entry:
Score: 0/10
Review: Real people? Puh-lease. Only ZUN's official work in my Touhou, thank you very much!
Entry No. 2: Undefined Fantastic Emotion
Score: 0/10
Review: I'm willing to look over big age differences, but seriously this is absurd. Also isn't Kokoro not meant to have any emotion at all? TOTALLY non-canon.
Entry No. 3: I hate you!
Score: 0/10
Review: Nearly gave this a 5/10 for using a male character, but since Seija reverse everything she is also technically male. Two males = no marks. Sorry!
Entry No. 4: A winter kiss
Score: 0/10
Review: Sekibanki's head should have fallen off when she got pushed. You can't just mess with physics like this.
Entry No. 5: Memory and Reality
Score: 0/10
Review: Far too long. I ain't reading this.
Entry No. 6: Love for an eternity
Score: 10/10
Review: Finally, a decent piece. Short and sweet, no broken physics, characters completely in character and the ship makes complete sense. I love the missing punctuation, excellent use of creative license. Dialogue is perfect. I can't criticise this at all.
Entry No. 7: Roses die, the secret is inside the pain
Score: 0/10
Review: I didn't understand the accents on the e, we don't have those in English. Also what is with this OC? I have no emotional investment in this character, why would I care if they died!
Entry No. 8: Lament of a Lunate Elf, for a kiss that never came
Score: 0/10
Review: An open ending? Whaaat! I want to know exactly what happens. Write an epilogue and it'll be a solid 4.20/10.
Entry No. 9: Game Changer
Score: 0/10
Review: Plot twist was fantastic. However:
"Still no answer
kicked her in the side."
There is no sentence here. I can't give points for pieces with incorrect grammar.
Entry No. 10: Sister's Legacy
Score: 0/10
Review: This one was kinda cool, but the weeb shit with Lay-nee was hilarious. "LAY-NEEEEEEE!!!" my sides burst, and this pieces should be srs bzns so nil points this time.
Entry No. 11: Fusion: Melting White Heart
Score: 0/10
Review: I was certainly able to read between the lines here, as there were so many empty lines. Also what were you thinking? Why would you torture Satori by making her read the minds of her pets fucking each other? They aren't even the same species. Also what are they doing using their ACTUAL NAMES!?! They were given nicknames for a reason - Orin even prefers Orin because she doesn't like long names. I think worst of all, however, is that the days don't start on one. This isn't computing, you don't need things to start on zero. But since you started on zero, I'll match it with your score. It's only fair!
Zak's graphic request for hair to change to white:
i.imgur.com/PcLLQ09.png
Not Backo, but how's this?
Reviews for the wonderful Arya's WriCom first round entry:
Entry No. 1: Bridge Between Hearts
Score: 0/10
Review: Real people? Puh-lease. Only ZUN's official work in my Touhou, thank you very much!
Entry No. 2: Undefined Fantastic Emotion
Score: 0/10
Review: I'm willing to look over big age differences, but seriously this is absurd. Also isn't Kokoro not meant to have any emotion at all? TOTALLY non-canon.
Entry No. 3: I hate you!
Score: 0/10
Review: Nearly gave this a 5/10 for using a male character, but since Seija reverse everything she is also technically male. Two males = no marks. Sorry!
Entry No. 4: A winter kiss
Score: 0/10
Review: Sekibanki's head should have fallen off when she got pushed. You can't just mess with physics like this.
Entry No. 5: Memory and Reality
Score: 0/10
Review: Far too long. I ain't reading this.
Entry No. 6: Love for an eternity
Score: 10/10
Review: Finally, a decent piece. Short and sweet, no broken physics, characters completely in character and the ship makes complete sense. I love the missing punctuation, excellent use of creative license. Dialogue is perfect. I can't criticise this at all.
Entry No. 7: Roses die, the secret is inside the pain
Score: 0/10
Review: I didn't understand the accents on the e, we don't have those in English. Also what is with this OC? I have no emotional investment in this character, why would I care if they died!
Entry No. 8: Lament of a Lunate Elf, for a kiss that never came
Score: 0/10
Review: An open ending? Whaaat! I want to know exactly what happens. Write an epilogue and it'll be a solid 4.20/10.
Entry No. 9: Game Changer
Score: 0/10
Review: Plot twist was fantastic. However:
"Still no answer
kicked her in the side."
There is no sentence here. I can't give points for pieces with incorrect grammar.
Entry No. 10: Sister's Legacy
Score: 0/10
Review: This one was kinda cool, but the weeb shit with Lay-nee was hilarious. "LAY-NEEEEEEE!!!" my sides burst, and this pieces should be srs bzns so nil points this time.
Entry No. 11: Fusion: Melting White Heart
Score: 0/10
Review: I was certainly able to read between the lines here, as there were so many empty lines. Also what were you thinking? Why would you torture Satori by making her read the minds of her pets fucking each other? They aren't even the same species. Also what are they doing using their ACTUAL NAMES!?! They were given nicknames for a reason - Orin even prefers Orin because she doesn't like long names. I think worst of all, however, is that the days don't start on one. This isn't computing, you don't need things to start on zero. But since you started on zero, I'll match it with your score. It's only fair!
No this is not serious, for those wondering. Don't take any offence.
Zak's graphic request for hair to change to white:
Jan 7, 2015 20:04:26 GMT Zak said:
When you get the chance please, could you color his hair to be white/silver?i.imgur.com/PcLLQ09.png
Not Backo, but how's this?